Well, it could have been worse, but it could have been a great deal better. I'll go into specifics later, though. First, a synop:
The Enterprise responds to a distress call, and finds a Talarian training ship, with radiation leaks. They rescue five of the ship's crew, all teenagers--four are Talarian, but one is _human_. The human youth, named Jono, refuses to talk to anyone until he hears Picard's title of Captain--then, he shows strict obedience to Picard's wishes. Beverly takes Picard aside and mentions that she found signs of rather severe injury some time ago--possibly abuse.
Shortly thereafter, the crew find out that Jono's real name is Jeremiah Rossa-- he's the grandson of an admiral, and his parents were killed ten years ago by the Talarians in a border skirmish. Troi tells Picard that Jono needs a father figure right now--and as the only person to whom Jono's shown the slightest positive response, Picard's the lucky candidate.
Picard, attempts to strike up friendly conversations with the boy, even bringing Jono into his quarters. However, when he brings up Jono's human heritage, Jono gets angry and storms out. Picard tries to tell Troi that he's not the best suited for the job, Troi instead convinces Picard that "no one is born a good parent", and he'll just have to do the best he can. Picard shows Jono a picture of his real parents, and as he leaves for the bridge, we see that Jono's memories of the attack are beginning to resurface.
Meanwhile, the captain of the Talarian ship K'Mer hails them, and when asked for an explanation of Jono's status, claims that Jono is his son. It seems that Endar claimed Jono during the attack according to Talarian tradition, and he absolutely refuses to let Jono return to the Federation, threatening war. (He also claims that Jono's past injuries were NOT abuse--Jono merely injured himself in beast-riding and contests with other youths.) With reservations, Picard allows Endar to see Jono--and when Jono says he wants to stay with Endar, Endar assures him he will, even if war is a result.
As two more Talarian ships approach (the Enterprise came deep into Talarian space to answer the call), Picard and company decide to try to convince Jono to stay, reasoning that Endar cannot take Jono if he is unwilling to leave. After Jono receives a message from his grandmother, Picard takes him to unwind by playing the 24th-century version of racquetball. During the game, however, Jono breaks down and cries. Later, after being assured that such feelings are part of humanity, he actually laughs in Ten-Forward at an unfortunate accident involving him, Wes, and a banana split. However, that evening, Picard wakes up to see Jono over him--just in time to feel Jono stabbing him with a dagger.
Fortunately, the blade was deflected by Picard's sternum, and his injuries are not life-threatening. However, Jono has now committed a Federation crime and must be dealt with by Federation justice. However, after hearing Jono say that he cannot betray Endar by drawing close to Picard, Picard realizes that he's made a terrible mistake in not considering Jono's feelings in all of this--and just as Endar's patience finally runs out, Picard informs him that he will let Jono return. He beams Jono back, but not before Jono bids him farewell with a ritual normally reserved for Talarian fathers and sons.
Well, that's the story. Now for an analysis:
I noticed that this show credited one person with the story, and another (Jeri Taylor, a producer) with the teleplay. That screams "massive rewrite" to my mind. It's not difficult to tell.
To begin with, I'm convinced that the alien race we encountered here was originally supposed to be Klingon, and not Talarian. Their features are similar (the Talarians have the same forehead ridges), and their stoic attitudes towards pain certainly have much in common. However, I suspect that the PTBaP (the Powers That Be at Paramount) looked at the script and said, "no, no--we don't even want shades of a hint that the Klingons are child abusers!!!" This, despite Data's one remark in "The Offspring" about "...and what Klingons do to _their_ children". Go figure. So anyway, I suspect they decided to pick another race--and since they had Klingons on their mind anyway, they looked at "Heart of Glory" and noticed the Talarians mentioned. Well, there we are.
Truth to tell, I would have preferred it if the story had been Klin-based, rather than Talarian-based. Interesting parallels could have been made between Jono and Worf, and we could have seen a bit more of a child's view of Klin culture. Maybe someday.
The rewrite also showed through in the child abuse angle. The first ten or fifteen minutes of this had my Roddenberry-flag spinning like a dynamo. It was preachy--preachy to an extreme I don't recall seeing since at least "The Bonding", and possibly since "Symbiosis", though there was no 90-second Public Service Announcement [TM] like there was in the latter story. However, after Picard's first conversation with Endar, the entire focus changed; from child abuse to the more basic question of when to take someone out of his/her "natural" environment.
This time, however, I approved of the change--the second two-thirds of the show were a good-sized improvement over the first third. Not enough to make it all that great, mind you--but a definite improvement. In fact, I'd have preferred that the entire show be devoted to that, since that topic has much more potential than child abuse. (Note: I'm not saying child abuse is boring or not worthy of attention--far from it. However, it's EXTREMELY difficult to focus on child abuse in a show like this without being preachy. But y'know, if they'd stuck with the Klingon angle, it might have had a shot. But I digress.)
On to other topics. Chad Allen didn't do a lousy job as Jono--certainly not as lousy a job as the kid who played Jeremy Aster in "The Bonding". On occasions in the show, I thought he did a fairly good job playing the stoic--even when he let his feelings show through, as in his next-to-last scene with Picard. However, he didn't do as good a job when he needed to have an emotional outburst--and God, but that noise he made as a mourning sound was annoying to listen to. He did an all right job, but by no means a great one.
As for the only other prominent guest star (Barbara Townsend as ADM Rossa was a throwaway), Sherman Howard did a decent job as Endar--probably better than Jono was done, come to think about it. He seemed to be a real person, and his way of life seemed consistent with his personality. We can't ask for much more than that.
The regulars were, well, passable. This was one of those rare occasions where I didn't particularly enjoy Stewart's performance. That's a pity, because he had the most screen time of all the regulars this week. Next most prominent was Marina, who gave one of her more disappointing performances, with the possible exception of one scene with Picard. The others had little more than walk-ons, unfortunately (Bev played a somewhat strong role, but it didn't feel like it; she kept to the background a lot).
Now, I've got two major objections to the story--one a "fictional" objection, and one a little more real.
1) Picard's statement that he wasn't the right man for the job echoed something I said several minutes earlier. You want a father figure who's good with kids? Fine. Picard is NOT the obvious choice--Riker is. He's also more physically imposing, which could be a factor for one brought up by a warrior race. Not putting Riker in instead of Picard here was a big mistake, particularly because this is one of the few situations where I think Frakes might have done a pretty good job.
2) Jono's sudden outpouring of emotion about his long-dead parents and the attack of ten years earlier happened far too fast. The kid was less than four years old when his parents were killed, and has spent ten years in a more-or- less stable environment--impassive, yes, but reasonably content. (That, after all, was the whole POINT of the show.) I was roughly the same age when my newborn brother died, and it doesn't affect me in anything close to the way Jono was affected. I'll admit that the circumstances are different, but I still found it completely unbelievable.
Now, there were a few things to like. I thought the scene in 10-Forward was pretty amusing, but you'll have to watch it for yourself. More importantly, I was glad to see that the episode did NOT have Jono returned happily to the human race. Unrealistic as I thought his outburst was, I thought his motiva- tions later for stabbing Picard were somewhat reasonable, and it would have been orders of magnitude worse for him to stay with the Federation. That much, at least, I think they did right.
However, this was by no means one of TNG's finer efforts. The ratings:
Plot: 5. It was a 6, but the Riker plothole brought it down. Plot Handling: 5. Too much rewriting and not enough GOOD writing. Characterization: 4. A reasonable Jono and a decent Endar, but very, very lackluster regulars. Technical: 6. The Talarian ships were lame, but I liked the racquetball game, and they didn't make any major errors.
TOTAL: 5. Watchable, but little more.
Bev gets caught in some strange situations--and was that the Traveler's silhouette I recognized in one place? I'll never tell. :-)
Tim Lynch (Cornell's first Astronomy B.A.; one of many Caltech grad students) BITNET: tlynch@citjuliet INTERNET: firstname.lastname@example.org UUCP: ...!email@example.com "_This_ is called a banana split--and it's quite possibly one of the greatest things in the universe." -- Copyright 1990, Timothy W. Lynch. All rights reserved, but feel free to ask... This article is explicitly prohibited from being used in any off-net compilation without due attribution and *express written consent of the author*. Walnut Creek and other CD-ROM distributors, take note.
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